Saturday, 1 March 2014

Deceit

Hidden behind the wall I see a shadow of a man, a man I supposedly love. His hands are around her waist; almost embracing her whole body, caressing slowly, his mouth is hungrily feeding on her mouth with a hunger that I have never experienced with him. My husband of 6 years who once said he would die but touch any other woman, who rarely touched me anymore, is ravishing someone else and then suddenly they turn and I see her face. 


Tears roll down my cheeks and I yell in disbelief as I see my best friend, my life support in my husband’s arms. True to his word my husband has not touched any other woman; he is with "V", my friend, my best friend, my guy friend Vikas!


This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.
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21 comments:

  1. Story in 5 lines! WOW!! I should also try this prompt. Nicely done Sfurti. :) Love, friendship, deceit, all in one..

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    1. Thank you so much Pooja. Will wait for your version, am sure it will be fabulous :)

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  2. Wow!
    I was wondering where you vanished when I saw that last update was in October. Good to see you blogging again Sfurti!

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    1. Ritu thanks so much, especially for checking on me. Was unwell but look forward to writing more and more now :)

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  3. being an observer of life in comical sense ... I had a smile on the face.While the intensity of the story remain intact. You are a remarkable story-teller dear Sfurti ma'm

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    1. Mysay..first of all welcome back dear. We missed you here. And now thank you so much for your lovely compliment. I still struggle with stories :)

      PS: I read it again now and I can also see the comical sense at the end :)

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  4. Such an emotional story in just five lines!! Wonderful. Best of luck for the contest.

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  5. Loved it :)
    http://surabhiitsmyway.blogspot.in

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  6. Kahaani me kya twist hai !
    reminded me of Bombay talkies movie. Good way of narrating in just a few lines :)

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    1. Thanks Afshan. Have not seen the movie but I am aware it is on a similar theme :)

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  7. Oh wow! That was awesome :)

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  8. That is such an interesting take !! What a twist.. Vikas ??? Super..

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  9. Wow! A nice take on the prompt!

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  10. Yeah, he kept his promise in a way. That was a twist in the story! :)

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