Sunday, 11 May 2014

Why?

She could feel the black, the cracks and the pores on her skin through which the smoke was coming out. She could smell the fire that was engulfing her whole being, inch by inch, part by part. She could hear the laughter coming from the other room; the laughs were filling her soul and were coming out as her muffled screams. She closed her eyes as her whole life ran in front of her, from her loving childhood, to her marriage, to her monstrous husband and in-laws and a tear fell through her eye, just one tear drop as she spoke her last words.
“Mom, why did you send me back?”

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This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.

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29 comments:

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    1. Yes :(. Thanks for visiting Shanmuga!

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  2. omg...that was good. different and thought provoking. all the best for the wow :)

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    1. Thanks Preethi and all the best to you too :)

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  3. Totally different take on the prompt!
    It's good that you chose to highlight the fact that, often, mothers do not give support to their daughters when their daughters need that support the most.

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    1. Thanks. Yes I wish we can pass on more education. Life and self respect is more important than any relationship.

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  4. Such a poignant and sad piece, told with so much emotion. Loved reading it, despite its sadness. You have given a very important reminder through this post.

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  5. Oh , that was sad and different ..
    but then the mother did not listen to her daughter I wonder what her thought is now ...

    Bikram

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  6. Just horrifying how each part of society actually supports such inhuman practices!

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    1. Sighh yes Rosh :( Thanks for visiting!

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  7. How very terrible! And the sad part is that it is widespread in our society :/.

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    1. Yes Rachna and widespread everywhere rural or urban!

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  8. Oh my God! Though we tell that India is progressing many such cases do happen even today and that is really a shame. A nice take on the prompt.

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  9. So very powerful. what five sentences can say in the hands of a writer...who feels.
    thank you for sharing! jean

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  10. "Woman, realize your power, you are a human.. "

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  11. oh! :(
    that was sad, poignant..
    I could see the fire blazing..

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  12. Story of so many, noo? Sad. :(

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  13. Can I just say WOW? That was a well-deserved wow, by the way. Very eloquently captured, Sfurti!

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  14. This is the most heartbreaking thing I've read in a long time. Well-written, and sobering recount of a wretched act.

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  15. Those last lines were so sad. The whole writing was.
    Thank you for peeking in on me and for your nice comment.
    I am glad I returned to here. You wrote it so nicely
    with the feeling oozing from the page.
    ..

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